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Cargo-cult Research → Fear → Proof → Multi : following the structure without understanding why each element exists.
How each offense was applied · 6 total
“Hi Marcus, I've been following Sentinel Shield's growth since your Series B announcement last month. Congratulations on the $42M raise. Her…”
“Hi Marcus, I've been following Sentinel Shield's growth since your Series B announcement last month. Congratulations on the $42M raise. Her…”
“Subject: Your attack surface is expanding Hi Marcus, I've been following Sentinel Shield's growth since your Series B announcement last mon…”
“Here's what concerns me”
“I'd love to set up a 30-minute call to walk through what we found. I can also loop in our CTO who previously ran security at Palo Alto Networks. We could also do a lunch meeting if that's easier. Or…”
“We helped Datadog's security team reduce their external attack surface by 60% in 11 weeks. We helped CrowdStrike's internal IT team do the same in 8.”